Splash! I hit the ground with a Thump! Thump! Thump!. The wave pulled me under I couldn't breath. I managed to swim out of the wave. But then the other wave hit me from behind. Luckly the other wave wasn't that big. I was pushed right in front of my nannans feet.
This is my story about about me and my nannan at the beach. I am learning about hooking our readers in because we want our readers to want to read our writing.
This is my story about about me and my nannan at the beach. I am learning about hooking our readers in because we want our readers to want to read our writing.
Whoa - what fantastic writing Maddi...your writing hooks me in straight away, you have really jumped straight into the action. A clever way to get the reader hooked...well done.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you have included what you were learning too :)
Mr A